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Re: Fingerprint in the Sky
Ahem, very romantic.. one suggestion. Capitalize your lines while editing, at least those that mark a new beginning.
Take for eg.
Quote:
The thumbnail points
downward to places I’ve been,
as I reach for those
places it has seen,
the hand becomes clear,
takes mine in its
under the setting sun,
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Your four segments between commas are good, but they can't be a single construction without a full stop.
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Who has understood the meaning of time,
For time alone is a mirage of a kind.
For to find time, is a dream of Man,
To be a man, whom time shall find.
Hirak.
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