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Old 14-12-2007, 12:07 PM
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Re: A plot to rule the world from a dark place

It was a good story but after the first half I started to glaze over it and I would have to go back and re-read sentences. It was funny and amusing though, but too technical for the average reader. Maybe if you wrote something about a regular house where everything goes wrong. But this was a solid story.

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