[xtremelady]

Due to the amount of spelling and grammar and errors in this am just going to use first paragraph as an example. The words in bold are errors.

You can call me Peter, it’s not my real name. But can you just call me it.

You can call me Peter; it’s not my real name, but can you just call me it.

Imagine me if you must as somone you once knew, or somone you liked.

Imagine me if you must as someone you once knew, or someone you liked.

or better yet imagine me as you. now I must warn you much of this story has been changed to protect the Innocent and the guilty so it is not the whole truth of this story.

Or better yet imagine me as you. Now I must warn you much of this story has been changed to protect the Innocent and the guilty, so it is not the whole truth of this story.

the real story is to terryfying and blood thursty to tell. but I will tell you this version of the story because of you herd the real story. you would be driven insane.

The real story is to terrifying and blood thirsty to tell. But I will tell you this version of the story because should you hear the real story, you would be driven insane.

Now all the above mistakes were simply picked up by Microsoft word and I do suggest using this or equivalent as a easy way of checking work before submitting. True won’t pick up everything – but does pick up a great deal.

As it stands you have created a lot of work for an editor. The other thing is punctuation – take a look at the link below – even if you don’t get it 100% correct..I am sure an editor will be more than happy to point out this – if word doesn’t pick it up.

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handou...commacomp.html

Once you have sorted some of the spelling and grammar out – I will be more than happy to read again and comment on content.