Lovely job! I love the image of ash that "runs through your fingertips, black and disbelieving". The redwood being reduced to ash...very powerful. A reminder that even the things we think could never change, like the relationship at the end of the piece, may change with time. Absolutely lovely. Oh, but I think you might have missed something:
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of their posture, there discipline,
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^_^ Should it be 'their'? Anways, great, great piece.