[jaziz69]

Right, another late post from the newbie!
One spelling mistake:

"Well its to bad now" - **too**

I personally felt that as a piece of poetry, i found it very frustrating and quite annoying to read. The flow was completely stop-start to no particular effect and rhyme was simplistic and quite disappointing for such a highly controversial issue. There were some lines that i liked, but even these were lost as i struggled to keep them in poetical context. When i first started reading, it sounded as if it was going to be limerick, which would have probably been better, exploring this issue through a more light-hearted satirical manner, but then it strayed off onto an un-aimed tangent.
I respect that you are very frustrated about Bush, as are many people, and that you stood up to make yourself heard, but i feel even much of your argument is very narrow and almost cliche, although this is also not helped by the simplicity with which you deliver them.

I'm sorry that this is a bit harsh, it's just that i really do think that if you're going to write about such controversial and complex issues, or any political issue for that manner, the poetry must be hard hitting and as clever/intricate as the issue itself, through either mental content or just though imagery and use of words/rhyme etc.

Also i know you wrote this ages ago, but i read it and just had to post!