[Ambrose]

At first I did not like how the grave digger dies, but his reaction to the zombie and his memory of the guy's execution clearly indicate that he had a hand in it, so I guess it was inevitable. Another thing I did not like was how the grave digger, upon discovering the zombie, remained rooted to the spot and let the zombie walk up and kill him. I always find it unrealistic when people are completely stunned by fear in stories. A person might be stunned for an instant, but I doubt anyone if put in that situation would neglect to run.

There was one sentence that struck me as awkward:

The sound of rusted old hinges, coming from the entrance gates as they swing wide open, while nearly falling off in the process, signals the arrival of the grave digger.

I think you mean to say that the hinges on the gate are nearly falling off but since the subject is the sound itself it does not quite fit.