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Old 18-12-2007, 07:34 AM
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Re: I Tried to warn you

I love it. One suggestion, slap a comma after the word hell in the first stanza. It just seems so natural to pause there when reading. Haha the feel of the toxic woman and the warning to the poor man, well is great really lol. I hope to see more of this from you!
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