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Old 18-12-2007, 08:44 AM
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Re: Somebody Like Me

this is definately great for your first attempt at righting lyrics. the one thing I kind of wasn't that pleased with was the second stanza of your first verse:

Quote:
As things went along
I fell more in love
Hit my knees in prayer
And thanked the man up above
But it was too good to last
Because I didn’t see
That you loved another
And had no time for me
I don't really think it fit in style wise with the rest of the song.
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