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Old 07-05-2005, 11:41 PM
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Re: Darkness

Very nicely written, however, (yes, there's always a "However" to any story) There were some parts of the story that sent me drifting into la la land. The parts where the sentences were started with "I think" and "really". You could have replaced them with sure-fire feelings to bring out the tension a little more

Other than that, very nicely done.
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