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Old 20-12-2007, 08:39 AM
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Re: Love

This is truly beautiful, touching and heart breaking. The ending, it holds traces of sadness but they seem to almost melt away with a sense of forgiveness and letting go. I found some of the descriptors in the beginning a bit heavy, I had to push myself forward but as soon as I hit the fourth paragraph you had me. I like the fact this is, or reads like a truthful account. The emotion is raw and really. Besides maybe simplifying the beginning a bit, or adding in a bit to break up the thick images, I do not have much more to offer in the way of advice. It was a brilliant piece.
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