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Old 14-02-2008, 08:42 AM
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Re: Over Coffee

I absolutely love this SeaN. Something I have come to love about your work is the realness of it. It is like a smack in the face, the things we all think but never record, it is gutsy. I think there is even more deep down in this one than I have gotten to yet, but I will continue dissecting Oh and as far as a category goes, this strikes me as human nature, the nature of love and lust, of casual meetings and something more. The end was the kicker for me, the safety in only writing about her, and unless I got the end wrong, the threat of doing more. I better never see something this good up in the bad poetry thread again! (could reach all the way across the US and backhand you for that!)

**edit** oh right, I also meant to mention that you may consider a comma after the please in your second line. I seemed to naturally pause there so that is what prompted the suggestion.
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