[Jimbalaya]

Very cool, Ambrose.

In the second paragraph you use the word brilliantly to describe a hedge, I think you could probably tak off the 'ly' and just leave it a brilliant. It's just a thing with me I guess. There was something else I noticed in the middle somewhere, but i can't remember what it was, I'll have to go back and find it if I can.

Overall, given the length of the piece, I found almost no errors, but I'm no professional. I enjoyed this opening part very much. It was engaging and you pumped out a great backstory for Coop. It's hard to tell yet if he's a good guy, or a bad guy, but I'm sure you'll get to that. Also, I had no sense of how old he is. I get the impression that he's maybe in his forties or thereabout, but nothing in the story really tells me.

Very nice job. I'm looking forward to part two.