Thread: Kindergarten Cannibals (Part 2): The Swarm
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Old 20-02-2008, 01:27 AM
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Re: Kindergarten Cannibals (Part 2): The Swarm
Great premise, and a good continuation from the first part. You obviously have a great (and slighty twisted) imagination, but the structure and the pacing seems a tad shaky. Also, why are they called guilds, seems a bit strange for a kindegarten. And where are the teachers in all this chaos?
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