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Re: Three Seasons
Alright I am trying to place my finger on what exactly it is about the opening line, and I think it is the "burn". I see where you are going with it by looking at the opening line of the next two stanzas but... erg, it still feels like it should be "burnt", "burning" or perhaps a comma after just "burn" to clarify. The only other thing would be perhaps to replace the word altogether with something like "glow", which is similar to the look of a burning spliff.
I love to take what I want from your work and see it as it I chose. Here I saw summer love, words and hastiness, no regard until winter set in and things got that icy chill, perhaps with a new hope come spring or even a time to ponder things passed that may have meant more while wrapped in the moment. Beautiful piece SeaN!
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