Thread: Her Doll
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Old 20-02-2008, 09:20 PM
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Re: Her Doll
how does a paper heart cut out in a jagged line portray a life renewed?

other than that, sad material but liked how you developed it and kept it all together. The rhyming is a bit awkward though.
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