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Re: The Sweetest Lullaby
Ok
1. You seem to have a heavy addiction to adverbs. Adverbs are meant to be used with caution and infrequency. Definitely go through this chapter and work on rewording to eliminate a lot of their usage.
2. 'That' - a word which is used way too often in literature by many. If you can remove it without changing the meaning of the sentence, or change it with which or something else, then do it. It has specific instances where it is ok, but otherwise, it should not be used.
3. Hyphens - there are several places where you have combined words, which don't make a word combined. They need to be hyphenated or changed to something else.
Those are my comments for now. Should give you a bit to work on.
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