[McCoy]

I did understand that the red powder was a drug, all I´m saying is that you might want to introduce it a bit better. You introduce it in a way that it seems like the reader is supposed to have read about the red powder earlier.

As he turned his head in that direction, Sally leaned over his left and slipped the red powder into his coke

about the other facts, all I´m saying is that you might want to clarify some of them more in your story. It really is a good story, I liked it a lot.