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Old 25-02-2008, 03:26 PM
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Re: Secrets

Welcome to SM! This is a nice first effort; you have a good grasp of the mechanics involved with writing, and that made it easy to edit. I thank you for that! One thing - the ending seemed a little abrupt. Maybe a little more development as to how she arrived at this decision. A description of her climbing on the sill, maybe, and then fading to black. A lot of promise here, though, so keep at it.

Rick
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