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Re: A Lemmings Tale
I love this. absolutely hilarious. Very imaginative.
This line isn't as smooth as the rest of the paragraph that preceeds it
'And since they had misplaced their fleet of stealth bombers and didn’t know where to find them, bombing raids were out of the question too.'
misplaced their fleet of stealth bombers and didn't know where to find them, I don't know there's just something about it that doesn't flow. I love the bracket work you're doing earlier and think that it would fit this sentance. they had misplaced their fleet of stealth bombers (which are impossible to find) something like that
anyway that piece had me laughing, the whole thing is terribly clever
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