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Re: Density: The girl who could, even when everyone said she couldn't Chapter 1
this is as short as my stuff, that's not good.
It definately made me laugh but there's really no story line and seems to exist just to introduce the characters who you don't get to know that well. I think if more time were taken developing this it could be much better because it is already entertaining. I hope I wasn't too harsh I do like it.
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It's amazing how sweet shit can smell
For a while I wore some as cologne
And many a woman I did woo
Until one day a man said to me
He said, "You smell of shit"
And it was true.
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