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Re: Dr. Berger Dies
In the fifth paragraph there is a change in tense I found it a little distracting. The story felt rushed, it needed to slow down, and add detail.
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It's amazing how sweet shit can smell
For a while I wore some as cologne
And many a woman I did woo
Until one day a man said to me
He said, "You smell of shit"
And it was true.
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