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Old 28-02-2008, 12:29 PM
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Re: Cereal Killer

I enjoyed it. When I read the title, I was confused about why it might be the the dark section.
Good story, I was heartbroken when his mother disappeared.
I like the main character too, he likes the works of other killers but he would never do more than beat cereal into a fine powder.
Also, he's not upset that it was all a mistake (the death of the poor lady shopping for something for her kids to have for breakfast).
Aww, she must've been scared.
Points for a good story.
Minus only a couple points for the mistakes pointed out by adrianhayter.
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