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Old 29-02-2008, 03:21 AM
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Re: The Dark Cloud

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“Look buddy, just get outta my way and keep quiet and the princess her only has to have one tragedy tonight.”
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I truly enjoyed this. You have very vivid imagery and character development. I was not put off so much by the beginning... for some reason it worked for me to just jump right in to the story (and also you provided the necessary background throughout the rest).

What put me off was the end, lol, I want more! I have to admit I am biased here, this is my favorite kind of story, a bit of adventure, fantasy, sci-fi and romance all rolled up together. Hope you finish this one up!
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