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Re: The Terrix
this story is far too short, you need to add details like what the dragon brigade symbol looks like, what the characters look like, does it smell in there, generally I have no real idea of what anything looks like or what the people sound like. i'm sure you have all those things visualized, just need to put it down.
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It's amazing how sweet shit can smell
For a while I wore some as cologne
And many a woman I did woo
Until one day a man said to me
He said, "You smell of shit"
And it was true.
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