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skidding on the passing,.
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(You have a comma and period)
What about adding
“like a feather”?
I have never had Kidney stones, but I hear they are a b*tch to deal with especially in the passing through the body.
The shortness of this write went straight to your point leaving an unforgettable image in one’s mind.
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wafting…never, never, never
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I really enjoyed that reminds of ‘The Raven.’ You know the mocking and teasing of something so simple and natural.
