[AdamThomas]

Hey,

Good stuff. I can't believe you're 16! I would have rather died than read a book when I was 16.

Here's some suggestions. Most of them could be due to our differences in style. I'm a fan of short declarative sentences, and I noticed some of your sentences run on.

1. The curves and turns were professionally hidden by the scenery Eichev continued to ignore, and, having had enough, he finally stopped to look around.

-You could have a period after "ignore" and start a new sentence with "Having." And you could delete "finally."

2. His boots crushed the small chunks of dirt beneath him, and as he took a few steps forward, the noise of the small pebbles grinding together under the weight of his body began to sound loud enough to drown out any noise as it echoed through the empty dwellings that surrounded him and his vehicle.

-This could be four sentences:
End the first starts after "...beneath him."
The second sentence is "He took a few steps forward."
The third starts "The noise of the small pebbles..."
The fourth starts "It echoded through the empty dwellings..."

3. There were the formalities, which ruled out friends.

-I'm nitpicking , but this coudl be "The formatlites ruled out friends." In my opinion, the shorter the better.

4. The man’s footsteps were quiet now, but could be heard

-"softer" instead of "quiet"

5. He looked around quickly and saw a chunk of rock had fallen from one of the corners of the table years ago. He picked it up and stood.

I would establish the missing table corner earlier. Perhaps when you first introduce the table as a prop. That will help diminish the "oh, that's convenient" factor when he notices a chunck of table in his time of need.