[Phonoho]

“Bats?” I echoed, not making the connection, my own radar still apparently jammed.

I love that sentence.
Thanks for the peep, peeps. I made those changes, Rena. I'm gonna add some things here and there to bring more of the room and atmosphere into the story, more dialogue from Vicki (really just expanding on her statments with more details about the photos), and maybe a few more words from Chic.