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Old 06-03-2008, 07:26 AM
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Re: "They're Watching Me."

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Originally Posted by Corneac View Post

I pour myself a coffee out of the pot that Ambrose has just brewed.

"You're safe now...shhhhh."

He continues to talk. "I'm being broad casted on the radio and on Thai TV..."

He brandishes the umbrella wildly. There were so many things I want to say to him. To ask him. Have you been taking your medication? When did you find out about Darren watching you?

I know it is useless; his mind is tormented by those demons, as they had haunted my sleep all those years ago. They haunt his sanity, distorting his perception of reality.
You use "as if" too much but I like it!
"as if I had electrocuted him"
"as if there is a secret camera in everything"

I like it.

I also love the deal with how Millie used to take comfort in sleeping in Ambrose's bed, but now it's almost the other way around.

I wished I had a description of each character, or at least their ages?

Good story.
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