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Re: Questions
First, the positives. I really like the idea of this, the repeated questions give that feeling of being bombarded by life, etc, and overall gives the piece a nice feeling. I can see that you've also tried to use some form and structure (the repeating first and third lines, question in lines two and four, etc.), and you've got a good start, however, it's just going to take a little practice to get a feel for flow and rhythym within that structure. Don't give up, it gets easier every time. ^_^ Overall, great work.
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The fog comes
on little cat feet.
It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
-Carl Sandburg
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