[Mr Morbid]

It's a good concept, but there were a few things i think you may need to improve:

It's a strange terrain, so maybe try and describe it more in the parts where thay're walking towards their destination

i did notice a few spelling/grammer things, like "cigarra" and "she pointed to the write of their path".

but on the whole, a good concept and i look foward to more stories in the future