Thread: Density: The girl who could, even when everyone said she couldn't Chapter 1
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Old 11-03-2008, 12:34 PM
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Re: Density: The girl who could, even when everyone said she couldn't Chapter 1
This reads well for an opening page of a longer story. Look into your punctuation. Also, is that the correct spelling of Lancaster? I look forward to more.
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