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Old 14-03-2008, 06:54 AM
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Re: The Terrix

Somewhat short even for a first chapter, but it does give a good background on the mission and what the marines are fighting against.

A little more detail would be good, like the Dragon Brigade symbol, and what flyers are, but I am sure that will be revealed in later chapters. Also, you could reveal some details on the landscape, such as unexploded missle shells on the ground, or men moving around, or vehicles, or even animals.

Still, this looks to be the makings of a good story, and I can't wait to see the next chapters.
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