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Old 16-03-2008, 01:11 AM
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Re: The Fallen

A good story, and I look forward to reading more. The way you told the story was good, with the coldness, the waiting, the vacation, you really got us to see the whole picture very easily.

However, I do have to agree with the other guys that there were some inconsistencies. The lack of a silencer, the recoil, the heart pounding, all realistic for a average person, but not so much for a seasoned hitman.

Good Story. Want More.
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