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Re: A Hate Story
Nice work here, Gareth. I really love the ending, and the emotion of anger definitely comes through loud and clear. ^_^ What I would advise you to do in future writings is simply watch your sentence length. Your content is great, so many thoughts in one sentence, even a correctly punctuated one, can get confusing. In the next thing you write, try to vary you sentence lengths; it might improve clarity and comprehension for the reader. Well, overall, great, great piece. Again, thanks for submitting and welcome to SM! ^_^
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The fog comes
on little cat feet.
It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
-Carl Sandburg
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