I thought this was good, but there were a few mistakes that caught my eye.
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He raced down each street after street.
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shouldn't it be
He raced down, street after street. or
He raced down each street
and shouldn't:
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The center of the city, the Monolith was the primary energy source...
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be:
The center of the city, the Monolith, was the primary energy source...
Those were some mistakes i found. And I liked the name
Plagus. Its catchy. Funny thing, it has GUS in it which is my username. Ha. Funny.
