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Old 18-03-2008, 09:19 AM
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Re: The Attic

It seems sort of that Jacob isn't all there, ya know what I mean?

I didn't quite get the ending. I did like how you described Jacob's feelings. Pretty good story. Your descriptive writing is very good.

What happened in the ending? Jacob disappeared? I do almost feel bad for Jacob though.

The way you wrote was good; story was iffy.
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