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Re: A plot to rule the world from a dark place
Interesting enough...I have to say it seemed like 2 different stories to me. The first part having a sort of National Lampoonish quality, but transforming into something different at the end. As Aleox stated earlier, I got lost on the waste\sewage pipe\alien part...it all seemed to run together a bit.
I think with the right phrasing though...you could actually make 2 good stories from this one.
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