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workhouse doctor and legendary drunkard
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I'd laugh at the proposed irony if it wasn't so close to the truth. One of the jobs with the highest alcoholism rate is being a doctor. The stress is immense.
^ MAJOR downer
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and partly because she didn’t have a penis.
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I laughed. Hard. This was easily the best line.
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And so it was that the doctor, in his alcohol-riddled state, put down the name the girl would live with the rest of her life: Density Barton
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Funny, because I like puns but I feel that it was a weak punch line.
Overall, try harder to flesh out stories. You seem to have a sense (at least a little) for the ironic and I like that. Make me laugh more. Oh, go read my stories now.