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Re: Parameters
Thank you.
I definitely agree that there is forced rhyme in this one, and it is no doubt not one of my best poems.
Although the weird thing is that those lines you mentioned as unpoetic were probably the four lines i'd spare if i had to pick prosaic parts of the poem. Anyway everyone has their own views  Well, thanks again.
However, though not exact by any means, I did try to make each corresponding lines of similar lengths.
Hirak.
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Who has understood the meaning of time,
For time alone is a mirage of a kind.
For to find time, is a dream of Man,
To be a man, whom time shall find.
Hirak.
Last edited by Hirak; 20-03-2008 at 04:32 AM.
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