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Old 22-03-2008, 01:28 AM
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Re: No heroes Left in Dirt

really good story, I enjoyed it, however i do have a 'thing' to point out.

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Originally Posted by Timmay View Post
Synopsis: Maravar Pass
Sixteen plus dead. Fifty plus fatally injured.
fatally injured means killed, so you might wanna change it, but it's up to you

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...was colder than a witch’s tit.
Just out of curiosity, is this a reference to BioShock?
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