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Originally Posted by Marksman
really good story, I enjoyed it, however i do have a 'thing' to point out.
fatally injured means killed, so you might wanna change it, but it's up to you
Just out of curiosity, is this a reference to BioShock?
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k, so...
DnDD, you did catch a mistake. ill fix that.
just for reference, this story was placed in the soviet intervention (not technically the invasion) of afghanistan. just a quick history lesson, it was consitered "the soviet vietnam". after 10 years of fighting in afghanistan, the soviets, not gaining any ground against the many citizen and rebel armies of afghanistan, retreated. they declaired it "a tactical stalemate."
I used maravar pass as the setting. presumable, this story takes place a little after the first battle. maravar pass was particularly brutal, so it seemed like a good setting.
and now to you, nate.
i used fatally injured just to advance the story. it seemed like a minor detail, and i probably misinterpeted it's meaning; (not trying to sound like a prick or anything) i assumed that fatally injured meant injured beyond the point of help. however, i didn't take it to mean "dead".
no offence, but it seems so minor that i probably wont change it.
and for part two, no, i didn't take that from bioshock; the day my computer could run bioshock would be an amazing day. no, that was an expression my mom had used earlier in the day to describe our house. i though it was clever, so it got a spot in my story.