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Re: A Hate Story
Hi Gareth84,
I really enjoyed reading it. Very well written. My only problem was with the beginning. It could have been more visual and descriptive. I wanted to be in that cubicle. The opening didn’t particularly grab me. but from:
“I imagine him at night in a dirty flat by himself, sittng in his “TV” chair for hours on end…”
onwards, I was hooked. Nicely done.
Last edited by Nish; 22-03-2008 at 04:12 AM.
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