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Old 23-03-2008, 12:13 AM
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Re: Prologue to Plagued Nation

Good Work, and that was pretty long for a prologue. I spotted a few mistakes:

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They tested it on lab animals, and were stunned at what happened.
It's tough to tell whether you meant the vaccine or the virus. Clarification would be good.

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Scientists added a chemical to this bomb that would cause anyone exposed to the gas to mutate uncontrollably.
Some more clarification here would be good. You could change scientists to Korean scientists.

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They also grew moderately larger, some more than others,became more violent and had a much bigger appetite for meat.
You need a space between others and became.

Good Prologue and I am definitely looking forward to more.
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