Thank you for making the changes. Looks better now.
The sweet/true part still bugs me a little. You need adverbs there, not adjectives. You're describing a verb: touch. Sweetly and truly would be grammatically right, but wouldn't flow well. Think of something else to place here. If you like it the way it is, I have no problem with that.
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Divine love flows from my lips,
Sweetest words that heal to the bone;
The heart of the matter is love.
Love from season to season,
Wise eyes and listening ears,
Passion, romance, fairytale lives.
In the soul and the spirit,
Love is real.
Open your mind to define real love,
How does it touch you so sweet and true,
Oh, how much love God has for you!
Deeply rooted in my everlasting love,
I remember joy and laughter
With all my heart and soul.
Divine love sings from my lips,
devoted voice for Him.
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I added some punctuation here. But punctuation is purely subjective; don't use it if you don't want to. And 'fairytale' is being used as an adjective here. Made that correction.
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Originally Posted by Jayna
I value your time for editing my work. I will change somethings and try to comment more on others works. thanks again for your hard work.
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No problem at all. I'm glad to be of help.