Wonderful, Mike, absolutely wonderful. You have a thing for poetry about feelings, and you put them forward so well. There's a lot to keep in mind while writing in this form; tetrameter, rhyme, repetition... One might think that these specifics would give rise to repetitive stanzas with forced rhyme, but in my opinion you did exceedingly well. I loved everything about this, even your alignment, choice of font, the colour... everything. Just one little thing about the formatting bugged me: your double (or is it triple?) spacing. When people use double spacing I feel like they're trying to increase the length of their poem, or rather, make it look like it's longer than it is. But that's just me. Your poem is exceptionally good, and in my opinion you don't need the spacing. But of course, you must have done it for a reason, so ignore me. Lol.
A couple of your lines went beyond the eight syllables, but with a form like this, that's perfectly excusable.
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The days keep getting darker it seems,
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9 syllables. Perhaps delete the 'the' in the beginning? The flow remains as good as it was and you have 8 syllables.
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A thing that I will ever again see,
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10 syllables. Not only that, I felt the flow was a little disjointed because of the 'again'. I suggest you delete that. It solves both the problems.
These are just my opinions. You've done a terrific job as it is.
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In listless sleep you haunt my dreams,
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This has got to be my favourite line.
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I wish that I could just break through
This haze I’m in, brought on by you,
Would you care if you only knew?
I still love you, I still love you.
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And my favourite stanza. You wrapped up the poem really well by connecting it back to the first stanza, using the word 'haze' again and reinforcing the image. The question in the third line adds greatly to the feeling you are trying to express. And then the last line is just perfect. Amazing work, Mike.