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Re: My Sweetheart
That was a pretty good story but I find that there is a weensy problem with it... You see, I keep finding that Jackie always reminisces about something when she hears a particular sentence. Sorry but its a bit cliched, with the whole reminiscing. Your plot was good but it would have been a tinge bit better if you had a wicked twist to it. That would inject more life into this story. I hope you found my criticism constructive!
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