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Old 06-04-2008, 11:52 PM
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Re: Stay Away

Hi kelpiewarrior,

You poem is pretty good, pretty angry actually. Just a little edit:

Quote:
When nobodies around!
I think you meant 'when nobody is around'

The proper way to put it would be

When nobody's around!

Also, you need to correct the typo:

Quote:
Stop interrutping my thoughts!
Another little thing:

Quote:
Like ice cold rain!
A hyphen between ice and old would be good.

Good work on this one!
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