Hi kelpiewarrior,
You poem is pretty good, pretty angry actually. Just a little edit:
I think you meant 'when nobody is around'
The proper way to put it would be
When nobody's around!
Also, you need to correct the typo:
Quote:
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Stop interrutping my thoughts!
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Another little thing:
A hyphen between ice and old would be good.
Good work on this one!