Excellent!
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There’re drowning in tears
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There're isn't an acceptable form. I think you meant
They're.
An apostrophe before Cause would be good since it's a short form.
devil's. You missed the apostrophe.
I seriously love this poem. The theme, the repetition, it was all carried out to perfection. Your talent as a lyricist is clearly shown here. Terrific work.