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Old 07-04-2008, 06:34 AM
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Re: Never Coming Back

This was beautiful. I like how at first my assumption from the lines was that this other person had betrayed you, or the 'you' in the poem. A break up, lies, etc. But then with the last two lines the entire meaning of the poem shifted and I had to reread it. I love poems like that. Overall it was very poignant and veiled, and it flowed well. Nicely done.
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