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Re: Fine, give me a quarter first
Personally, I didn't find the tone at the end to be loving, or showing the willingness to swallow pride for the girl. To me it seemed like a quiet, inward admission of blatantly using the girl despite knowing 'he' was no better. He had the same flaws he condemned her for, but was just better at making that into a strategy to trap her. But I did like the raw emotion evoked in this poem, and the way you twisted the mindset. Nicely written.
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